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I like your story. Its really mysterious. Keep writing! :)

thanks for your interesting story, but you should write shorter stories to this section. It took me quite a long time to read it all and think about it. First ...

It seems to me that you are becoming better writer every new sentence you have written. :)

This one really got me. I cant wait til another one of your stories :)

This story is really interesting. I like your style. The only thing I would recommend you is to rewrite some long sentences, because they are really difficult to read. Waiting ...

It's quite interesting although I don't understand, why he was waiting that long to speak to them after jumping from the tree... Also if the Nardikes are so good warriors ...

You should work on yourself much more. It's hilarious naive to come with this. :)

Nice description but too long for me. Quite boring in the middle of reading. It's good but it's not very original.