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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: .

    Aha, your poetry again. I like how honest it is, we can really see inside your head. I do agree that it doesn't really have a flow. You don't HAVE ...

    Apr 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: .

    There's nothing I would recommended for this because I actually think it's fine the way it is. The rhythm gets a little strange but thats actually one of the things ...

    Apr 26, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: They say

    I think it makes perfect sense, but it's simply a little cliche'. I also think you should make the meaning a little clearer. I understand that some people like the ...

    Apr 26, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Never Grow Up

    I don't really think that there's anything wrong with this story. It really touched my heart and gave me chills. I like how you described Lucy and her background as ...

    Apr 26, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Broken Suburban Glass

    So I'm assuming that this is possibly about your parents fighting, or abusing you. I like the way it was worded, but there are a couple errors. As she screams ...

    Apr 26, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Young Old One - Deleted

    Before you post something, it's best that you check your grammar. Boolovesyou already pointed that out thought. She walks down the street Filled with loops and curves Smiling at everyone ...

    Apr 25, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Poured Out

    My oh my, we have some amazing imagery here. You have talent. The only thing that personally bothers me is the lack of emotion. Every poem should make you feel, ...

    Apr 25, 2011


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