I loved this poem. The imagery and emotion were both very strong I thought. The story behind it was a little fuzzy and confusing. It did allow the reader to make inferences and guesses as to what was happening, but to be honest, I had no idea that it was about Jesus. Perhaps you shuold try to make this clearer. On the other hand, poetry can be depicted in different ways, so you could always leave it and allow the reader decide what it is about. Depends on how you wanted this poem to be read.
Other than the story, the images in this poem were beautiful.
I really enjoyed these ones:
BeautifulThrough cold lies and squinting eyes,
I lit a flame in a blackened sky.
Loved the imagery, but I'm not sure if the line in red really fits? It didn't seem to go with the rest of the stanza.Apparently,
Blind men don't want to see.
So they put clay in their eyes
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and wouldn't wash it free.
I also loved the repetition here:
These lines really stood out to me. Very powerful.Will you remember?
Will you remember?
You are definetly very talented. Enjoyed reading this, keep up the amazing work !
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