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  • Poetry » Narrative, Romantic
    Re: Self-expansion: A spoken word poem

    Hello! herbgirl here for a review! i would like to open by saying while this is a very nice poem written out, i can see it as outstanding as a ...

    Jun 14, 2017

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: I think I loved you

    Hello! herbgirl here for a review! i'd like to start by complimenting your ability to create a melancholy tone. The story of the loss of something that never quite happened ...

    Jun 5, 2017

  • Poetry » Humor, General
    Re: whitman-napo for 4/21/17

    Hello! herbgirl here for a review! This is a fascinating poem. i like how it's very stream-of-consciousness based, i feel that gave your poem a surreal unique tone that makes ...

    Apr 21, 2017

  • Poetry » Dramatic, Culture
    Re: Nine Billion

    Hello! herbgirl here for a review! You utilize your language in a very beautiful way in this poem. Your imagery is fantastic, it makes it very easy for your reader ...

    Feb 26, 2017

  • Short Story » Humor, Action / Adventure
    Re: It's A Cells World After All

    Hello! herbgirl here for a review! This is a very amusing story! It's a simple adventure, with a very fun and some what unique plot. Unfortunately, i'm not so familiar ...

    Feb 22, 2017

  • Short Story » Realistic, General
    Re: Friends Don't Share Such Silences

    Hello! herbgirl here for a review! To begin, i'd like to start by saying i like your writing style. You use some good imagery when describing the character's emotions, but ...

    Feb 21, 2017

  • Poetry » Mystery / Suspense, Dramatic
    Re: Dungeon

    Hello! herbgirl here for a review! i really liked the imagery and the abstract element of this piece. You painted a rather dark but fairly clear picture with your words, ...

    Feb 19, 2017

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: The Age-Old Traveler

    Hello! herbgirl here for a review! This is very nice! i am a huge fan of the imagery you used here, it was very unique and perfectly detailed, giving just ...

    Feb 19, 2017

  • Short Story » Literature, Realistic
    Re: Memories from a Roadside Motel -- Runaway

    Hello! herbgirl here for a review! From the opening sentence, i was absorbed into this story. We learn so much about the main character from just that sentence, it's surprising. ...

    Feb 17, 2017

  • Poetry » Spiritual, General
    Re: Battling with no weapon

    Hello! herbgirl here for a review! This is a nice piece. i like the idea of defeating monsters as you sleep, it's an interesting concept. You have some pretty good ...

    Feb 17, 2017

  • Poetry » Lyrical, Dramatic
    Re: Anatomy I

    Hello! herbgirl here for a review! Wow! i really liked this poem! You had such incredible imagery, i could really feel the sort pain you're talking about, i get this ...

    Feb 16, 2017

  • Poetry » Realistic, Romantic
    Re: Together

    Hello! herbgirl here for a review! So, i liked this poem because it was simple and sweet, and had some good imagery sprinkled throughout. The sweet little image of lovers ...

    Feb 15, 2017

  • Other » Romantic, Dramatic
    Re: lost

    Hello! herbgirl here for a review! This is an interesting piece. You clearly have some strong emotions, and the way you express them is attractive, although i think it could ...

    Feb 13, 2017

  • Poetry » Spiritual, Lyrical
    Re: Opposition

    Hello! herbgirl here for a review! This is a nice poem. You clearly have some good ideas to express, and i must say that i completely agree with them. They ...

    Feb 12, 2017

  • Poetry » Romantic, Dramatic
    Re: She came to me from the Ocean

    Hello! herbgirl here for a review! So, as i started reading this poem, i liked the two opening stanzas. The metaphors you begin to cultivate here are simple and attractive. ...

    Feb 11, 2017


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