Young Writers Society

Wow, what a neat little poem! How I wish it could be longer, but it's kind of cute the way it is :) You're very succinct in your use of ...

Hmmm...I have to say first that I do like an odd kind of way. Let me explain, In the first stanza your use of language is fantastic. The rhymes are ...

Oh wow...I love this!! First, I didn't notice any immediate spelling/grammar mistakes, so well done! And secondly, the concept is amazing, these wonderful dreams that turn against their maker! Your ...

Ah lovely! Your use of language is remarkable and portrays brilliantly the spirit of the crow :) I especially love this bit! - Flooded rivers; bloated bodies, wade. Deception is ...

Ah, beautiful! I probably overuse that word, but I love your story. Like chloe13 has said, your story has an almost lyrical quality to it, which slips over the mind. ...

Wow, beautiful! You have some stunning images here and your use of language conveys emotions very well. I especially like this bit; a face of an angel, body of a ...

This is a lovely little piece! I totally agree with what's being said above me, there are some beautiful images in there and I utterly know what it's like to ...

aw, this is beautiful! Like NightWriter, I agree, you have to watch your tenses, one or the other would make more sense! But other than that, your language is beautiful ...

hey there :) nice story :) I'm always intrigued by people who have these sort of twin-personalities. i'm doing psychology at school and it's something that has always interested me. ...

hi there! :) just wanted to say, wow, this is some seriously good writing here! The pace and flow of the writing is so lovely and so eye catching that ...

hey there! :) can i just say, i love the originality of your story! its very different to a lot of the stuff I've read and I love the main ...

Hey there :) I must say I found your story really interesting! Seeing the world through someone elses eyes (a stranger to the planet) really puts it in perspective, what ...

wow! your vocabulary is simply amazing - it paints such a vivid picture, I was totally hooked! I love your writing and though I agree a little with the people ...

Wow, I really like this! :) I like that fact that it's a story, but written from such a different perspective that it desn't really sound like a story when ...

hey, sorry it took so long for me to get round to reading it. First of all, wow, i love this chapter!! Most stories these days are about werewolves and ...