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Woah. Did you hear that noise? That was my mind being blown. This was a great concept, main character, and writing style. I loved it! Brittany's emotions were very easily ...

Wow! This was great! The overall idea was fantastic, and excitingly chilling. However, I do feel that the word 'normal' is a bit overused. In one of your earlier replies, ...

This poem was great! The opening stanza really draws the reader in. The second and third stanza were just as fabulous in keeping the idea flowing evenly throughout the poem. ...

This is a really good story! The ending is great, and the dialogue between the characters was natural. However, the opening statement didn't really catch my eye. However, based on ...

This is great! I like the way the story flowed smoothly into and out of the flashback. The description of the lake itself was phenomenal. The way you portrayed the ...

The first poem was fantastic! The meaning behind it was frank yet dark. This one was my favorite of the three. I hope to see more like this one! The ...

That is beautiful! The hidden message is so sweet. Even without seeing the secret message, the poem by itself is amazing and you should be proud of it. The only ...

This is a good start. I love the way you have portrayed Cody. However, I'm not entirely sure where you are trying to take the story. As more is added, ...

This was great! I loved it! I got lost in the book when I was reading. Martha is a realistic character with a strong personality and lots of potential. The ...

This is really cool! It's very plausible to an open mind. This topic is interesting and one I hadn't considered before. The idea is unique and the flow of the ...

I really like this! It has a good foundation, and the word choice is impeccable. The only thing I have to note on is the rhyming. Stanzas 1, 3, and ...

I really liked this. The plot was intriguing and unorthodox. The opening sentence was exceptional. it draws the reader in with a wicked embrace. It was fabulous. The only thing ...

You've created a very realistic family! I like it. There are a couple things that I would like to suggest. Some of the commas could be revised to fit the ...

Wow! That was great! Your main character has a powerful personality. The explanation of the Vaccine at the beginning was informative and intriguing. I really liked it. The only thing ...

That was great! I instantly bonded with the main character! Eli has a strong personality that makes him a likeable person. The only comment I have, if any, is the ...