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*head/desk* Trust me, dalring, I know I introduce too many characters too fast (though don't get me wrong, I appreciate your noticing it). But the truth is, the honest, painful ...

Chapter Two Tanvark had slept badly last night. He was so nervous; this would be his first solo job. Navik probably wouldn’t be happy with him afterwards, but their parents ...

*is a very, very bad bird* Myth, here you have gone and given me a wonderful, useful critique, and it has now taken me *counts* THREE MONTHS to get around ...

Thanks, both of you, I've really been waiting for someone to comment. Crystal, I understand how it could be confusing to you, sorry you didn't enjoy it. AmeliaOliver, I'll deffinately ...

What can I say, I enjoyed it. The use of lower caps was good, methinks, and the line breaks really gave the piece a solid rythm (sp?). Overall, a good ...

Ooo, bird agrees with shireling on the descript of henchmen idea.

No corny villians. A tad cheesy, but not unbearable. Then again, I am your biggest fan, you might not want to listen to me. But trust me about the villain ...

Ooo, this is the first time I've ever gotten a threat from a reader. :D Yay! ShadowTwit: you are, as ever, my eagle-eyes. I'm also REALLY glad you liked the ...

Chapter 18 “Allarhana!” The word exploded into CavernLights and Cerreno, who had screamed it, dropped to his knees next to the corpse of Dosh. Kalab had launched himself from his ...

But J. does! Do you mean he should earlier? Wait a minute, does he? *checks* Edit: *gasp!* He doesn't!!! For some reason, I always imagined he did--THANK YOU IMP!!!!!! :smt038

um....darling, you know I love you, but if anyone else gave me a crit that badly spelled/grammar-checked (i.e. "snap"), I wouldn't exactly listen to them. Put some effort into what ...

You're fantastic, darling, as are your suggestions. While I like it that people enjoy In Thrall, it's kinda annoying when no one actaully takes the time to find out what's ...

Darling, that's what I did with In Thrall, and look at what that's evolved into. Also, just as a note of encouragement, In Thrall also started out as a fanfic ...

Phorcys, do you want my head to pop with all the swelling you've given it? ;) Honestly, it's fantastic to hear from people who love my stuff so much--it's people ...

The stench of scorched flesh and the brooding smell of burnt thatch filled Danteel’s nostrils. He looked around the razed village, the smoke from the ruins clogging the clear blue ...