guineapiggirl

Hello! I enjoyed reading this. The description was good, as was the idea. I think Leonardo's pretty cool, and thought it was quite interesting to do a story about the ...

I really enjoyed this piece of work. I wanted to know more about the narrator, and why she likes the boy and what her view on the girl is, but ...

There is a novel with the same basis called 'The Boy In The Striped Pyjamas'. I don't know if you know of it or not, but I imagine you do. ...

Firstly, grammar... Title: Although YOU'RE gone, you still haunt me... (3 dot dot dots works better) I think that what with the title saying he is gone, it would be ...

This is a lovely lovely beautiful poem. I don't really have any improvements to suggest. Cupid's bow has crossed it's 'limits' could possibly be a little different, the word limit ...

I thought this was a really good interesting poem. I especially enjoyed the bit about the star-shaped scar and the cars swerving apart. I thought that was a really interesting ...

This is interesting. I didn't find it a very skilled piece of work. I found it strange that the father was obviously religious but used a rude word and at ...

I'm sorry but this really bored me. There just wasn't anything going on at all, for any of it. Something I noticed that was bad: His eyes grazed over her. ...

Wow... Wow... I didn't get it for most of the story. At first I just thought she was violent, but then with the sudden use of that word, that blunt ...

Hi. I liked this! Just a few bits and bobs where I'd have worded it differently Verse one: I was once in a dream; Where no one said good bye ...

This was quite touching. I thought it was rather good. The rhyming could definitely do with some work; I didn't like the way some verses didn't rhyme at all and ...

Hi aquatica. I agree with the others. You need to add some paragraphing and sort out the punctuation, and the tenses. The title really confused me, just as an example. ...

Hmm... OK. So he just goes and kills himself. That's not very plausible. This story made me feel sick with contempt. I seriously hated it. And that's not just because ...

Hi. What sin is the person committing? this was unclear. i didn't personally like this poem as it was dark and a bit odd, but i thought it was quite ...

I really liked this poem, and thought that it was quite tastefully done. Its very sad, and I thought that perhaps the ending was a little too empty. You could ...