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Re: Untitled- Prologue and Chapter 1
So, I can sense an amazing story developing here. The beginning is well thought out- prologue and all. I like that you started with that. I'm assuming sometime later in ...
Jun 24, 2014 -
Re: Untitled
Oooh Oh my! I love this story so much! I have NEVER read anything like it and it has a really awesome plot. Yes, I'm sure you are aware of ...
Jan 4, 2014 -
Re: Candles-One
Hi there! So, Overall I like what you have going here and I'm excited to see where it leads. First think I noticed was that you used Cassidy's name A ...
Jan 4, 2014 -
Re: Change of Heart: Two
Ooh I'm back! First of all I still love this story. Second of all this Serah sister seems like a real bitch. I love where this story is going and ...
Dec 1, 2013 -
Re: Change of Heart: One
I love this, so far! Since I see you've only posted this a few days ago you probably haven't added more, but I really* hope you do. - Nevermind I ...
Dec 1, 2013 -
Re: Shattering Whisper
First thing I noticed was the paragraphs! They are huge, try to space them out more please! It will really help with the flow of the story. (Trust me, I ...
Dec 18, 2012 -
Re: Labyrinth: Chapter One
Hi there, going to nit pick a few things. "Father used to say there were stories, old dark stories silenced by the hand of history: that's what he said." I ...
Dec 17, 2012 -
Re: Dear Lorraine
To be honest, it bored me a bit in the beginning, but then it got close to the end and BAM it hit me. Try livening it up a bit ...
Dec 17, 2012 -
Re: Lucky Me (working title)
Going to nit pick just a bit. "But tonight was important, and this queue was taking forever." You shouldn't start a sentence with 'But" maybe try adding a comma before ...
Dec 17, 2012 -
Re: First Kiss
Hey, there. So here's what I have to say. I really like this story. It connected with me in some ways and kept me wanting more. Like 'Lycando' said I ...
Dec 17, 2012 -
Re: Open Wound
Very well done piece. It really sucked me in from the beginning and I find that hard to do with a lot of stories. The flashbacks are so descriptive and ...
Dec 17, 2012 -
Re: The Sapphire Princess Chapter 1
Hello, I really liked the story! There were a few spelling and grammatical errors, but nothing serious! Seeing that this is chapter one, I kinda felt like everything was so ...
Aug 15, 2011 -
Re: All good things must come to an end. ( Part 1 )
I thought this was great! At first I got a little confused with the tenses but caught on! I encourage you to keep writing and pursue your dreams, you have ...
Aug 15, 2011