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Re: Removed #2
Hii there. I really enjoyed reading your poem! I may not be able to give you the best help but I can start by pointing out a few mistakes.. Yet ...
Sep 3, 2008 -
Re: Tainted Blood Ch.1 part 3
Hi there. Before anything I would like to tell you, I read your two previous chapters, loved it and when you right the next one please PM me...please do! I ...
Aug 17, 2008 -
Re: Hotdog
That was completely entertaining and hilarious! You made a few gramatical mistakes, though. “Claire, what kind of dog do you want?” He asked, walking Claire’s backyard. INSTEAD: "“Claire, what
Aug 15, 2008 -
Re: Unconditionly love
hi there kaylatheyoungwritter That was a good poem...not too great but ok. Here are a few things I noticed. 1) He makes me feel like a real woman ready for ...
Aug 14, 2008 -
Re: Will you?
Hey there unsterblichkeit36 I absolutely enjoyed reading your poem. The poem was very clear to me since the beginning. I like the way you used simple words to convey strong ...
Aug 14, 2008 -
Re: The White Man's Burden (2008 Version)
hi Jaden G. I liked your poem and yes, i do agree with you. (Even though Iam not american or from Iraq) here are a few things I noticed. Their ...
Aug 14, 2008 -
Re: Hey Crazy: A short little humor piece I wrote
It was good but you mixed up the tense. So I’m on the bus and there were some interesting people on it. Instead try: So I was on the bus ...
Aug 11, 2008 -
Re: deleted
hii salsahanno! I enjoyed reading this although it was a bit too short to be considered a chapter. Anywayz..i did not find too many mistakes in this one. Try and ...
Aug 11, 2008 -
Re: Misery Lane
wonderful poem...really worth reading..lovely!! I love all the words used.. You can trip me when you want, I know you want to be cool. But behind that taunt, I'm all ...
Aug 11, 2008 -
Re: The Mirror
I really loved this has a ver deep meaning and actually made me sit and think. So you're staring at the pills again, memorising how they've helped you sleep, maybe ...
Aug 11, 2008 -
Re: Secrets of the Heart - Chapter Two
Oh my gosh! I loved it. I ussually feel bored to read long stories but this made me wish there was more of it. I really really enjoyed reading it. ...
Aug 11, 2008 -
Re: Who am I?........ A positive look on myself!
hi there! so I enjoyed reading your poem. Not the best ever but it was good. I would like to point out a grammatical error(or it might have been a ...
Aug 4, 2008 -
Re: Secrets of the Heart - Chapter One
hi lucyy. ok, so this is my first review so I will try to be the best that I can. here goes: I enjoy reading the way you describe people ...
Jul 24, 2008