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Hi! Welcome to YWS. I am thirteen, and also like you, I was a newbie. I know what it’s like when you first join YWS, but let me just tell ...

Hi Night Mistress First off, I like your choice of names. Very original. But, I just have to inform you that a prologue, like a preface, is a sneak peek ...

Hello, lollipop89281 ! I’d like to say the name you chose was very original. Pierre Roux. I’m guessing he’s from Quebec, or some of that region? Anyhow; Remember, Moroux? I ...

Hello ! First I'd like to say welcome to YWS! I'm a fellow thirteen year old newbie, so if you need anything - a friend, instructions, etc. - just PM ...

Wow, this is really good beginning. I have to admit that I am intrigued. Where are you planning to go with this? I'd love to hear more. On another note, ...

"What do you want?" he said as he rubbed his eyes. The son was shining dimly. It had turned a pale pinkish-orange. He’d slept through the entire day. How about ...

Amazing! You realed me immediatly! You really do a good job of portraying your characters through the dialogue, which is a key tip in writing. You should definitely continue, because ...

The summer night was hauntingly still. Nothing moved, not even the leaves covering the surrounding trees. That completely realed me in. You did a good job with your comparison: A ...

Hi there! I have to say, your story is definitely going somewhere. I'd love to hear how it pans out, and how the protagonist lives with Ruby. On another note, ...