forest_ofthe_nightingale

This is really gorgeous... it brought back some memories. Thank you!!! You made me happy to read it!!!

Thank you so much for critiquing this!!! I'll work on the beginning, which is going to be the opening "introductory" scene for this (if we ever get around to performing ...

Yeah, no in-depth stuff here... but I know how easy it is to do that... I've done the same thing to other people like 5 million times.

Ummm.... you missed the point... its supposed to be funny. Every line, I use a rhyming dictionary and I have to use the first word I see in that sentence... ...

This was a good poem... I don't even like orange juice, so that's saying something. :D

I have yet to finish it... look out for PART TWO!!!! I do need to work on the rhythm though... ah well. I'll change it soon enough.

I'm in on a secret.... yoha will reveal all soon enough.... I LOVE IT, but i cannot tell why currently. Sorry!

this wasn't deleteable... :(

Changed... sorry about the grammar error. Any better?

Natyr Lucio: Don't look to another poet for that effect. What? Sorry, I understand everything ... and agree with a majority of it... but this. I wrote it. :D

Well, I still stand in that LOTR lovers can find it quite diffucult to crit this. And I agree in that sonnets are insane to write. If I even tried ...

I changed it some... I think this sounds better, but it's hard to love your own writing. Any opinions?

Awesome battle that one. I loved your rhyme scheme as well... and that you remained consistent with it. That's hard to do and not sound forced, but you got it. ...

That's kind of funny that you thought that the last line was forced (it's good to know that it sounded like that), but that actually was the easiest stanza to ...

I've already told you this, but I'll remind you: it's the second line of each stanza that is the problem. In all your first lines, you have a color description. ...