flowerchild

Nice! The flow was good. I'm only 10, but I do read poetry. it sound like something I've read before in school from a good book, so, you must be ...

I described my feelings of a hot day from the opinion of a kid who has abusive or alchahol addicted addicted parents/guardian

This is the first time I've written something like this and I don't know if I'm that good. There is more coming! Alot more!

WHOA! That was breathtaking. you should write more. A sequel or something. I would read a book like that for sure! Try to fix the spelling though.

You did well typing it in the correct way but you might want to try getting your on topic as do others. It was cool how you rewrote some of ...

You kinda waver over different subjects but your verses are really neat.

WOW! You were really descriptive and you really made people want to read it with your beginning. The way you ended the peom was very intresting to.

That was really good! It was intriguing. You should write more.

Very good but specify what is happening to certian people and decide if you're going to use names or not.