flippinmayonnaise

You deserve a better critique than I am able to give you, but I will do my best to explain what I thought about this poem. I enjoyed how you ...

I like what you're trying to say, I just have trouble with a few inconsistencies. Poetry itself certainly does not have to rhyme or follow a distinct rhythmic (or other) ...

What type of music is this set to? And how fast are your stanzas sung? Like June said, it's difficult to critique without proper information, but I will try my ...

Okay, just letting you know, I will never be able to top the critique by Demeter, but I can let you know what I thought (: The emotion is certainly ...

Wow, i really enjoyed your imagery and use of diction. Rejection is definitely something that everyone has (or will) experience at one time or another and having just been rejected, ...

Good job for jumping into something that is, needless to say, nerve-wracking, especially in a new forum. I did like the idea, although I think you need to take a ...

Poetry is allowed to be anything it wants, thats why its poetry. I'd agree, but there's a difference between poetry that's for the author and poetry that's for the reader. ...

I like the thought you put behind the poem and can tell it means alot to you. It's simple, but nice and lighthearted. I would only work on the rhyming ...

I really love the emotion because it's raw and I enjoyed the line "...must a quivering lip catch liquid memories..." I like what you're trying to say at the end, ...