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Re: Binge
Hey, Onii-Chan here! This is extremely relatable! I eat junk food all the time and feel like this. You perfectly captured the feeling of feeling crummy. One thing, though, (its ...
Apr 5, 2018 -
Re: Dark Crown - Chapter 1.1
Hey, Onii-Chan here! Great, great story. I was kept interested the entire chapter. You described her surroundings so well. The character was so elaborately designed. I can’t wait to read ...
Apr 4, 2018 -
Re: Weeb
Hey, Onii-Chan here! Aaaaaaaaa relatable! As a professional weeb (just look at my name) I feel like I already love this poem. I feel like being alone with my sweet, ...
Apr 4, 2018 -
Re: Ancient-Chapter 1 The Great Argument.
Hey, Onii-Chan here! Before I say anything, Your work was great, but it needs some improvement. 1. Grammar! I’m sorry, but I’m more sensitive(?) to grammar in literature. Just keep ...
Apr 4, 2018 -
Re: Chapter 1
Hey, Onii-Chan here! Wow. This was a really good piece. It had a really subtle approach. It had less of an action-movie feel, and that’s hard to achieve, especially on ...
Apr 4, 2018 -
Re: Away and Gone
Hey, It’s Onii-Chan! This is a very powerful poem, and it seems like you put in a lot of effort. One thing I noticed, though, was how the reflections didn’t ...
Apr 4, 2018