fight4whatsright

this whole thing was one big info dump. i can't say i liked it very much. one mistake i found... So I told her I was fine and that my ...

i really liked this. at first i didn't get it, but then i realised it was just a dream :D the pictures the words formed in my mind were spectacular. ...

hi! this really grabbed me, good work. great imagry at the start. one problem; The years she spent lieing i think that's meant to be lying awake really nice peice ...

the shortness of the lines makes the poem kind of hard and annoying to read because they're so choppy, maybe you could lengthen them up a bit. but thats just ...

gday. For your 1st poem i think the rhyme sounds a bit forced, remember that poems don't always have to rhyme. It has good rhythm though. The second poem however ...

Death of the Titans -Richard “Eh? What’s that?” I asked, getting out of my bed. “Get out of bed, you lazy bum. There’s a visitor at the door. this should ...

I'm scared. Are you going to kill me? This prologue made me curious, it made me want to read more, so i guess it did its job. However it was ...

Hi. Everyone else has beat me to pointing out your errors but nobody else has mentioned that this is a little short to be a chapter and i didn't really ...

hi i liked really liked this poem. Its short, beautiful, etc, etc. the only thing i had a problem with was the last line. i just feel like its totally ...

i feel like this person, i too am losing the talent to write. people like what i wrote when i was eleven better than what i right now :( anyway, ...