fading-dream

Woah, I forgot I posted this. I'm glad you all enjoyed it. I personally consider myself to be an awful person because this is what happy things make me think ...

Thanks for the comments. I agree with EVERYTHING. I actually had the thought to make Shannon cry and the tear would save them in a burst of blinding light. It ...

Thanks for the kind words Busheldood! I really appreciate your input. I agree, there are TONS of holes left in the story. I actually intentionally did this so that I ...

Hi i'm BuzzBee I hope I can help! He leaves her there to rot alone Thus is the way he has always known I like this, it flows well and ...

Very good poem. Living in the plains of Saskatchewan, I can definitely relate to this. For example, the leaves on the trees are still green, yet there is snow everywhere. ...

It's a shame you aren't going to fix this up, because no reader should ever give up on their works. I really think you could create a nice story out ...

I hope the whole novel isn't like this. I know my review was the harshest thing I have ever written, but I was very appalled. Maybe I saw it wrong, ...

Thank you so much for the review Imaginative Insanity. I agree with you on everything and have changed it. I also added a new paragraph that describes the character a ...

Thank you all for your comments. The response was certainly unexpected. If you look now, you will notice the last stanza was cut out (for obvious reasons). I am thinking ...

Okay, I got an 86% on this piece. I thought I deserved at least a ninety.... Oh well, she's super harsh.

Thanks for the comments guys. I suppose I was unaware that "Historical Fiction" needed a non-fiction basis (Kind of ironic). If someone could move this into "Fantasy", I would very ...

Thanks for reviewing guys. I have fixed tnme22's errors and will fix the ones that Mars has mentioned (It's saved at school, which I fixed some things so I can't ...

I believe this story could be told well if there was much more description and emotional detail and if it made actual sense. Okay, I am open to constructive criticism ...

Thanks for the comments guys, I really appreciate it. Now, originally I had planned to leave the story as is, but I can see where the criticisms are coming from. ...

Thanks for the comments. I like my other works better but still felt that I needed to post this. I might go back and change some stuff because after two ...