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and here I was thinking this place had gone to the dogs.

I really liked the imagery you used here, and even though there was no rhyme, the flow was exceptional. Oh, and the way you used your exclamations was brilliant!! Gold ...

edited... a different ending :-)

hahahha I swear I'm no necrophiliac. - or a rapist for that matter. this is just bitterness, innocent bitterness - that is all. It was not meant for an audience, ...

hey thanks guys... I've gotten rid of a lot of the caps and the profanity... the narrator has more of a chilling tone now: thanks for your suggestions :-) And ...

i like it... but its hard to read metal lyrics on paper... they always look too over the top without the screams and that this is incredibly slipknot-esque. you a ...

lol clever i won't repeat the 20 ppl before me other to say.. i like your style... its fresh :-) Brendan

I havn't looked at this since I wrote it, so I didn't know there was so many errors! Thanks for fixing it up for me it sounds heaps better now. ...

you don't need punctuation... I can't believe the people criticising you for not having it :@