erratik_statik

I love a bit of dark er stuff and this is a very original poem. The metaphors you used and the way you mix up and cross over between make-up ...

Theme is great. and wow you are a talented wordsmith: your manipulation of the language and gymnastics with the pen is quite incredible. but... I think you may have overdone ...

wow. i'm a little taken aback at how much this poem struck a chord with me.. the theme hit home. Stunning: in a literal sense, not just as the overused, ...

I really like this, again, but I think it could be tweaked a little.. I think you could reorder the first line: maybe 'Giant, silver, beautiful birds.' There is an ...

i love reading poetry like this the rhythm is in the sort of chaos of the lengths and the lack of punctuation is great too. the metaphors you used were ...

its gorgeous. i wish i knew a girl who could write something like that to a guy. it has a rare integrity to it for a specific love poem. most ...

i really like this, its a fresh style taking on an old issue. it really is a great metaphor that tells of the in and out nature of our moods... ...

firstly this poem is beautiful, the metaphors are strikingly original but the imagery remains clear. The flow is good too: a few flaws that come almost inevitably when u write ...