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Okay, this was amazing, I'll tell you that. Just a few errors: This doesn't sound right to me, I think you should change it. Josephine sat opposite her And this ...

Before all the critique and praise, one thing in the author's note :D : "Of" should be after the "kind". because I am kind blanked out Okay. In the first ...

This was great! The concept really grabbed me, and I loved it! A(n) (few) error(s): I think this part has the word face repeated too much. Look: their faces face ...

Okay, this was great. Just a few things listed. This line didn't sound quite right. Maybe you can change it. It’s not a place where people return from, And also, ...

In the first line, is should be if, I think. Also, I don't really that many question marks are needed. Here: And what if I told you I was leaving ...

Just one thing, "good luck with the writing!" should be "Good luck with the writing!" And also, "the hand says poking fun" should be "the hand says, poking fun". This ...

Oi, this was cool. Just one spelling issue. I think "out" should be "our". the sake of out friendship. And this is supposed to be "Give me a hand here?" ...

Okay, I have to admit, this is awesome. Except you didn't really rhyme. I always think songs should rhyme to sound good. It should. And in the third paragraph, I ...

Okay, some critique. This was good, but I don't think there's supposed to be a space after this dash. It just doesn't look right. In this same part, though, you ...

Um, one thing. Not saying this was bad, this was great! Awesome! I don't know if this was supposed to be there though: Ever if I try I can never ...

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Okay, this is probably one of the poems I would write, if everybody here wasn't fixed on free verse. :D Okay. Sooooo...*clears throat* I think this part: The clock is ...

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Wow, that was a great ending! I loved it! Although it's full of gore... Anyways! I sure think you could do more showing here: This castle resembled the makeup of ...

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OMIGOSH, now I know why I followed you. You follow my interests, about Greek demigods. I love you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love this! Some things: I clutched my bow as tight as ...

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Okay, this is mostly my fault,but I'm confused by a lot of this. Like this part: "But there is one thing that has changed since then." Her green eyes bore ...

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Okay...not funny, but not grim either. I seriously don't know why but one question... He slams two platters, Of meat on the table. Not chicken or beef, But his dog, ...