You

I'll quickly get through the nitpicks...

And never ever leaving behind

Gives a feeling grand

That’s so incredible

That’s just the way you are

Hey, Chips here with a review.

I liked the emotion and focus you had in your poem, it seemed as if it were really written for someone else.

I do however, have some suggestions which may be of help to you.

"I was sitting here thinking,

Of words I want to say,"

Here, I would suggest writing *wanted* to keep everything flowing in past tense or perhaps, *desired* for a more varied vocabulary.

"But they just wouldn't come out right. "

I think this line would be even better if expressed more poetically, rather than telling. Maybe adding some more metaphors to express how words didn't come easily and the impact it had.

"I got a piece of paper"

I know this line is probably supposed to be simple, but it comes across as not putting much thought in the significant other the poem will be written for, from the way its expressed. It would be even better if you said why you got it and how you felt.

"Something though

You don’t understand, "

I felt like this would flow more if written with additional few words, in the first line in particular, *There is something* perhaps?

Overall this was a nice poem. Keep writing! Hope this review helped.


--Chippy

Um, one thing. Not saying this was bad, this was great! Awesome! I don't know if this was supposed to be there though:


Ever if I try I can never show

The way you take care of me

Is ever supposed to be even? I dunno. Hey, that rhymed! Okay, enough with the critique already. Get on with the praise:

I loved this poem! I think you really hit the target bulls-eye, I actually understood it!!!!!! And you actually made your point. I love this!!!!

Hello! Suzette here to review!
Okay so let me start out with I LOVE THIS POEM! It's very good and gets your point across very well and I just love it. Sorry, I'm gushing over your poem...
But there is two things first, I would love to see some stanzas in here, I think it would make it look a bit cleaner. Also, some more punctuation would clean it up a bit. But all in all I really like this poem!

Keep writing,
Suzette.

This is a long poem, but it is well written. Also, as rhiasofia said, you can use some punctuation. Opening is very strong and it kinda sounds like it maybe it could be in the beginning or end.
Then ending line is very nice. Nice way to end off a poem. And for something you just wrote, it isn't bad. Good work and keep on writing.

-Unknown391625

Hello hello and good morning to you, lovely! Rhia here to review for you.

This is a bit lengthy, so I'm going to go bit by bit, and tell you whenever something stands out to me, good or bad, kay? Kay.

I was sitting here thinking,

Of words I want to say,

But they just wouldn’t come out right.

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You could really do with some punctuation too. If you don't want to use punctuation, you could always play with line breaks and enjambment instead. However, you need to do something to add pauses in this piece, because I feel rushed when reading it. Remember, punctuation or line breaks serve to signify a pause for the reader, so they're very helpful. They add some dramtaic pauses, build up, etc. But also save my breath so I don't read this all as one long run-on

And never ever leaving behind

For accepting my thoughts and feelings

Something though

You don’t understand,

This bit was worded a bit strangely. I feel like you accidentally left out a "me" between "leaving" and "behind".

Also, I think that "something" should be changed to "even", cause it doesn't really make sense to me right now.

Also, it seemed like you tried to rhyme, but I couldn't follw a true set rhyme scheme. If you're going to rhyme, it needs to be consistent. Otherwise, you can always play with internal rhyme, or slant rhyme. Also, I felt like some lines were worded strangely, just to make them rhyme, which is something you [i]always