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hey there! i'm sorry if my critique sucks... i haven't done this in awhile. =x but i'll try my best! you certainly have a knack for describing things through metaphor ...

There are many others, 35 to be exact, and while I would like to introduce them all to you, I have not the time. Some others of note include: Juan, ...

there's something about this... admittedly, it's not the best thing ever. but there is something about it... a sort of cute to it. the beat... i love the beat to ...

i like the flow of this. reading this, i could hear an acoustic guitar being played to it. something i would say though, is the tense of your poem. maybe ...

this is sort of random, but i remember what i was trying to say last time. this reminds me a lot of the book catcher in the rye , and ...

ahh! i didn't even notice this? how could i not notice this? well... i really, really liked this. yeah, it changed from topic to topic, but that's part of why ...

writing poetry is difficult. poetry is more than face value words. it goes deeper than saying "i love you, do you love me?" i'm not saying i'm an expert at ...

i've got to agree again. while the poem is complex and nice, it seems as if you are trying too hard to spruce up the poem with complicated words. i ...

hmm... i'm sure al would like this. =P what bothered me was your overconcentration of trying to dedicate this poem to this al character. you seemed desperate to include specific ...

i think there were some things which you could have done a lot with. however, a lot of what you wrote was slightly cliche. one of those swept under the ...

narrative poetry does have an objective point to poetry. however... it doesn't mean that you can simply make the poem rhyme, aloof, and medieval and call it narritive poetry. it ...

i like the poem you have now- you have a lot to offer for it. at the same time, though, it seems as if you run on your own train ...

as this style of poetry, i think the poem is pretty good. now because it is a more focused on rhythm and rhyme, i think you should read the poem ...

aww... sad. but i like it. the first stanza was my favorite, mostly because there was no point-blank explanation needed, yet it remained poetic. in the second stanza, you started ...

there's not really much that you're saying, so i guess there isn't really much to say about it. i don't know... what exactly do you want us to do with ...