New and improved "To Die for Love"

Never read any of your previous work, so won't bother with the poll. Don't really like to put my responses into such rigid categories, either - that's what the comments are for. Anyway, to move on to said comments.

This said nothing. Absolutely nothing. I come away after reading it not knowing who the narrator is, who the "you" is, or why I should care. There's not a single detail here to make it relate to my life (I know that sounds really self-absorbed, but by "me" I mean any reader, and your goal as a poet is to draw in your readers and make them care about the things you deem worth writing a poem about). Here's some suggestions:
1) Take out all cliche phrases, the kind that just pop into your head ready to go through years of hearing other people say them. Example:

never in a million years

2) Punctuate your poem, and reread it four or five times, at least once out loud, to check that your punctuation illustrates exactly how you want your reader to read it. You've done a pretty good job of this, but there are some places where it seemed carelessly done. Example:

Would I die for you my love?
Of course I would
Would you die for me?
If you loved me you would

(Should probably be :
Would I die for you, my love?
Of course I would.
Would you die for me?
If you loved me you would.)
That's just a minor thing, but it's easy to fix.
3) A little bit of repetition goes a long way, and there's definitely such a thing as too much of it. Example: the whole poem. It's question, answer, question, answer, pretty much the whole way. Count the number of times you say "die" and "love". After the first stanza, I could predict the response to every question. All the questions were pretty much the same, too. It's long, and the repetition makes it boring. Don't treat your readers like they're dumb - no one likes that.
4) Be subtle. This is the essence of poetry. Imagery, metaphors, pathetic fallacy - literary elements are the tools of every writer. Use them to craft your poem so it doesn't just state outright what you're trying to say. Create an atmosphere. Give the background dimensions, make your characters multi-faceted, develop a plotline, build a rhyme scheme. Again, don't treat your readers like they're dumb. It's like a jigsaw puzzle: the point isn't to have the finished picture, but to enjoy putting it together. All art is like this; it doesn't come out and tell you its message, it let's you learn it on your own by experiencing the artwork presented. It leads you along a path, it doesn't just drop you at your destination.
5) Write about something real. This had no effect on me. I mean, what is love? What is death? What is forever? Is time really limitless? I don't have the experience to answer these and the other questions posed by your use of "words without meanings" (love, for example), and I'm cynical enough to believe no human does. Try to be more concrete. Which leads me to my next point...
6) Include details that your reader can connect with. Give me some information here - the color of her hair, the sound of his voice, where they first met, the reason her parents don't like him, why he wouldn't let her move in, whether she's a morning person, what kind of coffee he likes. Your reader needs something real, needs to be able to see, hear, feel and smell what you're trying to describe.

Ok, that was a lot. Sorry about that. It's great that you're writing poetry, that you're so interested in improving it. Keep up the writing - despite all my harsh comments there was something here I liked. I can't wait to read your next poem! If you have any questions about that whole long blob of text, just PM me.
~Sophie