emmylou1995

I like this poem. It played with my emotions, which is interesting because I have the same kind of doubts. I think you might want to try to fix up ...

Wow! I love this! Well, its actually really, really ad, but amazing. I didn't find anything wrong with it. I especially like the last part where you say "I remember ...

[quote="KAH"]How could someone so nice die? She was happy, understanding, and inspirational. Everyone she met became touched by her. She knew how her life would end, She saw it coming, ...

Okay, i like your concept. What you are lacking are three things. one, this poem has no description in it. Well, a little. But poems are supposed to show, not ...

Well! very beautiful! Okay, there were a few things wrong with this. Too much repetition! You said the same thing over and over and over again! It just gets old. ...

Short and simple and yet, some kind of deeper meaning to it. I love the first stanza but the last stanza contradicts it. I think you could do a lot ...

Okay, I think this is sort of interesting. The idea is old but new ideas were stuck in your poem that I have not heard before. I like the idea ...

Okay, Flower~Child, I think that, one, this poem is depressing. But, that's pretty self explanatory. And two, its repetitive. And three, it is sort of weird. The word love and ...

I agree with everyone else, your poem is missing something. I cannot tell what but it needs more. I liked most of the imagery though, even though I dislike the ...

It was okay. For some of it I was really confused. It just didnt make sense, other parts I really liked. As Elinor suggested, lighten up on the repitition in ...

I liked it. Interesting idea. Okay, I think you use the word yet too much. Try using some other word. Also, while I was reading it, there seemed to be ...

Okay, I think there is alot more you can do to this poem. Add more detail. Describe the person, the jail. I also was not clear on what is going ...

I like it! I will admit it is not my favorite poem ever. Heres why. All you do in the poem is tell us the relationship, tell us the girls ...

Nice! I like your description of the warehouse and the moon. The whole thing with the shadows, though? I'm not digging it. The main characters thoughts were very...into is and ...

Okay, interesting idea. But, the writing needs alot of improvement. You need less talking, more description. What does Grannies house look like? What does the dog look like? WHat does ...