emilyleigh

Thanks for the feedback! Looking back I so agree the flow was a bit off and difficult to get through. I've updated it and hopefully it all reads together easier.

Since I've had a few reviews now, I'm gonna explain my intention with this poem and it'll also give clarity to the confusing parts: The narrator is someone who is ...

Even simple things can be conveyed with depth of emotion...not saying the words have to be complex, as I prefer simple words and such. Don't apologize as there's nothing to ...

Well thank you! I agree, the line lengths and grammar need some tweaking--more so in the punctuation. I'm looking back and seeing misplaced commas and such. I still plan to ...

Oh I see now. I copied and pasted from Word, which is probably why it got formatted that way. Fixed!

Dont understand your comment? All the line skips are intentional.

You are totally right, I really am not sure why I used those semi colons at the time! Itd what happens when im writing half awake I suppose...haha. I'll definitely ...

I actually meant ivory as in the color ivory. :p It has more than one meaning but I can see the misunderstanding there. For me it was an ivory sheet ...

I agree! This was the first draft so it was a bit of word vomit. :p I wanted the reader to initially question why Kyle was being so rude and ...

Oh you're right! That was just a typo, but thanks for catching that :)

Thank you everyone for taking the time to read this; I appreciate it very much. I'm very glad to hear that you all enjoyed my poem. I usually stick with ...

Hi! This was well written, but really random. I know it is based off a dream, but that doesn't mean you should write it exactly as one. No dream makes ...

Thanks for the revisions Snoink :) It was meant to be literal, and then the end to have some religous meaning. I wanted it to be able to be interpreted ...