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Re: all the pretty things
this was an overall pretty good poem...i like how you described the butterfly, and my favorite line was "as still as ice in april". i also was a bit confused ...
Aug 22, 2011 -
Re: Pouring my heart out
this was a very deep message. i really liked the general idea of the poem, but it was kind of jumbled when it came to words, if you know what ...
Aug 18, 2011 -
Re: WHEN I'M GONE
wow this was very entrancing...i loved it! it really brings to mind that famous quote--"you never really know what you have until it's gone!" great job i especially love the ...
Aug 18, 2011 -
Re: Love, the Problem
wow, this was very interesting. i really like the way you described things, like "gripped the throat of the axe" etc. the only thing i found to be edited was ...
Aug 17, 2011 -
Re: London Riots
i thought this was pretty good, but i was kind of confused. i knew what the thugs had to do with the riot, but other than that i was really...i ...
Aug 17, 2011 -
Re: Quidditch for first years
this was well thought out but i found some spelling mistakes "occordingly" is supposed to be spelled "accordingly". i was confused as too who left with Filch. you said the ...
Aug 17, 2011 -
Re: The Girl in the Desert
wow this was fantastically written! i loved how you described each feature of the girl, and your poem had great imagery!!! i also liked how you described the earth and ...
Aug 17, 2011 -
Re: That Night
wow, i can tell this is from real experience, or you made it sound like it! you used fantastic imagery "the first whip", the screaming out in pain, etc. awesome, ...
Aug 17, 2011 -
Re: Cage
wow this was fantastic! i really loved the feeling of the cage, shackles of his mind. good rhyme scheme, good imagery! it was kind of redundant, but it was very ...
Aug 17, 2011 -
Re: Mind Over Matter
this was very well written. i loved the part about "words fitting like lincoln logs" this line had great imagery. in fact, the whole poem had really good imagery. but ...
Aug 17, 2011 -
Re: Writers Block
this was fantastic! i get writer's block a ton so i can really relate to this. i don't really know how to explain this, but you, like, explained this "disease" ...
Aug 17, 2011
