elephantwalrus

Hi there! Thank you so much for the review; I really appreciate it :) I actually purposefully made this piece less passionate and less physically intimate than others I've seen ...

Hey guys! I know it's been a year, but I finally recorded it! I actually recorded it a while ago, and didn't tell anyone. So here it is, if anyone ...

Hey, thanks for the support, guys! I'm out of town this week, so I won't be able to record or post the song online for a couple weeks. I'll let ...

The edited draft is better. I still think that the profuse line breaks are unnecessary and distracting, but other than that, the edited draft is much improved. The most glaring ...

I see how the Spanish can be confusing. The phrases translate to, "What?" I asked, using my best Spanglish. "Well..." Megan said, following suit, "My family has just bought a ...

Whisperer: to answer your question, it did not happen in real life :) . These characters are completely fictional, and the events are as well. I do use some of ...

Don't worry about it! Pilgrim's Progress was a good guess. I just use a lot of Shakespeare allusions in my work because all of my English teachers love him. My ...

Thanks for the critiques, guys! As for the bonus points, kris was correct with the "Romeo and Juliet" allusion. The two lines, “Oh then, dear saint, let lips do what ...

Wow, thanks for all the critiques and support, guys! I really appreciate it. I have plans for the next few installments in the series, so keep your eyes peeled for ...

Hooray! Thanks for the reviews. I shall keep those in mind as I edit this poem and write more nonsense poetry. :D

Thanks for the critiques, dudes! I will try to find time to work on this during the week.

Thanks for the critiques, guys. I really want to keep the first part of the story from Lillian’s POV, so I changed the ending. It is less intimate then the ...

Wow, now that I read it with rested eyes, I can see that it is cheesy beyond all reason. I'll try to salvage what I can. Sorry that it's so ...

I agree with Phantom. It's intriguing, but it could use more. Maybe put in more exposition...other than that, your writing styles good. Nice work!

The second draft is definitely better. I liked how you explain why he got beat up; it adds depth to the girl, the unknown antagonist, and himself. Your description in ...