elephantwalrus

Hi there, I don't usually critique action/adventure stories, but I really enjoyed this piece. Is it a prologue to something more, or just something meant to stand on its own? ...

Hi there! Welcome to the Young Writer's Society! Sorry that no one's taken the time to critique your work yet. Let's fix that now, shall we? I really appreciate the ...

Hi there, Your voice is very sweet in this poem, which I like a lot. I also like all the different ways you thought of how you might have lost ...

Hi there, I like the cadence of this piece. It flows nicely. Actually, I just like the whole poem. It's tone is serious, yet romantic, and the imagery is sound, ...

Hi there, First off, this is a creative idea. However, I think it belongs in a poetry forum instead of non-fiction. Your diction provides for imagery that would make it ...

Hi there! I liked the perspective of this piece. The emotion was constant throughout without being over-the-top, and the imagery of the taillights shining like rubies was particularly thoughtful. Firs

Hi there, First, I'd like to point out if there are any expletives in your work you should probably rate it as such so that no one gets offended. That ...

I liked the imagery in these lyrics a lot. It gives the audience something to think about instead of just complaining about your heartbreak. I appreciate the poetry of this ...

Hi there, surajjangid! Is this a piece of fiction, or just some of your own thoughts? If they are your own thoughts, I agree that they do not belong in ...

Hi there, Rachymare. First off, you use some powerful diction in this piece. It draws out a ton of emotion in a short space, which is great. I particularly liked ...

Your insights are thoughtful and refreshing, but perhaps a bit vague in "Living Today" and "Yesterday's Memories." I'd also suggest that you consider combining some of the lines and augmenting ...

This story made me smile :) . I'm afraid I can't take it through a line by line review today, but here's an overview: Praise: you have a terrific, fun ...

This was pretty good; depressing, granted, but pretty good. :) My biggest suggestion would be to add punctuation. Without it, the poem's flow is off, the line is messed up, ...

This has a pretty constant tone and mood; the words that you chose fit will with the tone, keeping it melancholy, but not melodramatic :D . Well done! There were ...

This is really good, considering it's your second poem. Everyone already covered the bases as far as nitpicks go, but I have my signature one that I'm going to use: ...