electricbluemonkey

WOW! ZZAP has, whoo, way too much time. I don't think I could write that much in one sitting, and I agree with Drizzt.

Uhh...good...but not as good as the first one, I might say. There were a bit of run on sentences and not too much detailing. SHOW, DONT TELL! Remember that now...

Reminds me a lot of Robot Dreams...I dont know why...

Yeah, weird=cool! That was good, really, really good.

Yeah, I agree, I was going to critique you but I was too lazy. Although Brian did a much better job!

Much better, thank 'e.

Yeah same here...

...oookay...

Yeah, weird, what was it supposed to say?

Yep, a cell phone is a mobile, its called that in some parts of Europe, I think. And KND is a show about kids in a clubhouse that save the ...

I figured it did look like a history of a story. Add more when you are finished, it may turn out really good, KayJuran!

Yeah, very weird, but weird is good and original! Two thumbs up :D

Yeah, I've never seen somebody write so good before, an emotional moment. Not a lot of authors are good at this! Maybe only really profesionals published ones, but this is ...

That story was very original. I get what you are saying after dumping it after the second sentence, I always did that when I was a kid of 4th.

Really good, Brian. Kudos to you. When I find my SF story the first thing I am doing is posting it here.