ehawthorne

Of course! Some examples that I came across included:“The gate guards gave a scream of terror and they did not stop screaming as…” — this feels a little awkward because ...

Thanks so much for the tips! :)

Question: I noticed this says Chapter Five. Is it actually Chapter Four, or did you accidentally publish Chapter Five before Four? Or something else?

Thanks so much for reviewing my work

That’s totally understandable! It’s still a lovely poem!

Got it!

Thanks for the advice! I appreciate it

Thanks for reading/advice! I’ll be sure to edit

Thanks for reading!

I’m really sorry but my parents don’t allow me to have either.

And welcome to YWS

Of course you can share it! Unfortunately, I do not have a comic version — I’m not the best artist — but that sounds very cool.

Thanks for stopping by! I really like that piece of advice of the sentence about her not having much choice along with the guard saying it.

Hi! Thanks for reviewing! Chapter 2 is supposed to go after chapter 1. I’m not sure why when I posted it chapter 2 was put before it. I’ll try fixing ...

Thanks for taking the time to read and review!