dragonfphoenix

Thanks for the review! Yep. Read down there \/ \/ for an explanation of why.

Thanks for the review! (Umm, I'm still a New Member? That's really funny, especially since I'm a mod. :D ) And although the lines may appear fragmented, they're actually only ...

Thanks for the review! Glad you liked it. With my Engineering class, one of the things we had to do was go out "into nature" and observe something (in my ...

Thanks for the review!

"All your lines start with capital letters, so in that case, all your lines should also end with periods. Not all of them do." Not true. In poetry, every line ...

fortis! *wags pointer-finger* For shame.

Thanks for the review. On the punctuation, the periods in the quotes are intentional (style decision). Therefore, I treated the capitalization as if I'd used commas. And I've heard the ...

My advice would be to leave it up. A) I'm the only one who's reviewed it at this point. B) You need to give yourself some space before revising anything. ...

*grins sheepishly* Well, this was a rough draft, and some of the examples were over-exaggerated beyond what I was going for (based on your points). So I'll definitely keep that ...

Again, thank you, Knight Hannah. I will be deeply pondering all of that as I go through and revise this story.

Thanks for the pointers! I'll keep those in mind when I review.

Yeah, sorry about that. When I wrote this chapter, I'd put several days (weeks?) between me and the last chapter. So when revision comes, this will probably be cut (if ...

Glad to see you reviewing again, Penguin! Yes, this is entirely different than Kira's story. I'm glad you liked this. Thanks for the review, and I hope you'll check out ...

Lovely Hannah, it's so good to get a review from you! I did exactly what you advised (Ctrl F of "my mouth shut") on the master document, and I only ...

Dialogue clarification call heard and acknowledge. Thanks for the tip. Glad you liked it! And thanks for the review!