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Knight Dragon, here to review! For the technical: "He won't leave," should be "He will not leave" to keep four beats and the flow going. "He is the darkness." should ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! All right, technical first. "Just give me that can, The one with the fizz." I felt like these should have been one line, "Just give ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! This is the only section that felt awkward and didn't flow well. "The law of dynamic conservation: reincarnation." Now, the transition here off of the ...

Knight Dragon, here to give the second of three reviews (because we know where to find you). :D All right, the big "stuck out like a neon sign" line. "Not ...

Knight Dragon of the Knights of the Green Room, here to give one of the three reviews requested for the Library Challenge. (Yes, that was all you needed to do. ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical first: "I Take in a breathe and know it is not my last one.", your "take" is capitalized and it shouldn't be. "Because in ...

As a Knight, one of my duties is to review Green Room stories and rescue them from the dangers of being "un-reviewed". So I'm going to read this as objectively ...

Knight Dragon, here to review. The only piece of technical advice I have for this piece: "my mountain will be tall and strong and stony as my hands", insert an ...

Haha, so had that feeling when I found out I had a quiz to do over a chapter I never read because I didn't know to, fifteen minutes before class. ...

GAAH!!! I'm glad I checked this even though I already knew it was only one sentence (at the time of this review). *sighs* And here I thought I couldn't do ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! The only technical thing: "No one, even you, did expect your voice to announce that in such a bold manner." This should have been written ...

Well, this was definitely outside the realm of fiction (I know I'm only stating the obvious, but I didn't entirely know what to expect when I saw the title). I ...

All right, technical first. Several times, you have "alright" and "atleast" instead of "all right" and "at least". Those should be fixed. " swept its meteor-scarred beak open to swallow ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! I liked the structure of the poem, and it took a little digging to find the connection between all three segments. But what didn't make ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! The only two technical things I found: "to river and back home, to you," read a little roughly because I was expecting "to the river ...