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Hey ash, I liked this. As everyone else said your descriptions are amazing. I liked how you put part of it about Isaac... I'm just a little confused about whether ...

Hey Ash. Love the descriptions.. and the title.. and the whole story. You're doing an excellent job with this, I only found a couple of mistakes, just proofread and you ...

I usually don't like things related to religion but this was pretty cool. The plot was interesting and you kept me reading without getting bored so that's a good sign! ...

I think I got it and even if I didn't it was amazing. There were some awkward sentences but they can be easily fixed. Just read the piece aloud and ...

I agree with everyone, you're so good at writing cliff hangers! Great ending, can't wait for more. Awesome chapter, not enough good words to explain it! ~Dommy :D BTW, Sorry ...

Yes, very very intense! This was wicked good! I'm glad Isaac and Sophia got together again, but is he going to still stick around after Rebecca?? Aw man!! I can't ...

this was awesome! You captured Meyer's style of writing as Jacob perfectly. I can't wait for you to post more!! Sorry this review isn't much help! Great Job! ~Dommy :P

Hi! sorry this took so long for me to get to! :) This is still really interesting. I'm confused by the dreams and what's hunting Bella but the suspense makes ...

I liked this. The sarcasm and humor were great. The others have caught the little mistakes so I won't repeat them. :) I liked the way you went on a ...

Hey Jared! Thanks for messaging me when you posted this, it was as great as the others! I liked how your portrayed Steve's emotions, how he acted like he didn't ...

aww this was so sad! You really did a good job in capturing Sophia's emotions and Isaac's as well. I like the plot twist, I can tell it's going to ...

Hey, Sunny! This had a slow start but it got more interesting at the end. Just to get the little nitpicking over with... Right at the beginning of the story ...

Hey, DwahnePipe, Okay so this is a good piece. I just suggest adding more details about the photograph itself and more about Adrian. Add his age so we know how ...

This is fabulously creepy! I love it! I was glued to my seat, it's so addicting. Demeter already corrected some of the little things that I found, the only other ...

hershey, I'm very eager to see where this will go. I do agree, you should expand the chapters if you want to separate them this way. Parts of it were ...