dommy65

Heyy, I think that mhmmcolleenx0 covered most of the line by line reviews so I'll spare you on that ;). This sounded like it came right from the first chapters ...

Hey! Let's just get the critique through first :D It was calm outside. The wind was blowing, but not to hard. The time is 8:59 p.m. Tense change... Not really ...

Heyy, This was really good and a quick, interesting read. I think you just need to fix a couple things. First, your grammar is a little off but nothing that ...

hey, crazysocklover117, this was cute. Just remember that you have to make two reviews before posting anything! Oh, curse my furry little tale! I'm not sure if this is supposed ...

hey! this is pretty good. i liked it a lot. I personally liked the metaphors, I thought they added very well to the story. Loved it as always, I can't ...

Yay! You're done!! So amazing!! I'm so freaked out tonight.. Probably shouldn't have read this alone with the lights off! This review is pretty much pointless but i just wanted ...

Hey Ash! This was so good! Every chapter gets better! The relationships are stronger in this rewrite. There's more of a hostility between Nora and Sophia, it makes the Carmen ...

Hey! all right... so this was kind of choppy and moved too fast. Well how about i just get the nitpicks over with first. I was sitting in my room ...

Ash! This was so great! I loved it! Sophia and Carmen are so much better than in the previous version. They're closer and more relatable. Great job once again! I ...

Hmm... Interesting. I liked this, it was kind of a little rant on time it was very intriguing. The ending didn't really do it for me- but that's just personal ...

WOW!! loved it!! so much!! this review is pretty much useless but it just keeps getting better with each edit. I can't wait until you post more!! ~Dommy :D

Hey! okay... a tad bit confusing. The metaphors and daydreaming was a little out there and made it hard to follow up until the end. Then it just came together, ...

Okay so first let me tell you I'm on my iPod so I can't do a really good review. Next, loved it!!! The foreshadowing was great and I loved how ...

Hey! Loved it! I just didn't really understand the part about the Tower card... maybe you could explain just what that card meant... I'm guessing it's something bad? :? ha ...

Okay, in my opinion, this was way too Poe-ish for me. Saying over and over again that the narrator wasn't insane was the exact thing that Edgar Allen Poe did ...