dogsrule5

How her dad died will be explained later in the story as it continues. Yes, I'm also aware that the talking is messed up. The reason for that is because ...

Okay, thanks for the review. Sometimes I have trouble picking which tense I like best. Present??? Or Past??? Thanks again, -Dogs

I've heard the before. Show, not tell. It seems as if I can't seem to get the show down. I know how to tell, and I seem to do it ...

Cool! :D

No problem, and I'm glad it helped.

Thanks for the review, and I don't know why the dialogue did that, I am writing this story on too sites, and this is one of them, the other is ...

Thanks for the review, and I know about how the dialogue should be in paragraphs, but when I copied and pasted it from the other site I'm writing this on, ...

Thanks for the review.

Thanks for the review

The dialogue should get better at points I believe, because I think what happens is, since I'm posting this book on two websites, when I copy and paste it from ...

Okay, well I don't want to argue, but thanks again.

Hey, thanks for the review, also I've never read the Percy Jackson series, and this is not a fan fiction. I don't read many, many stories, I mostly read things ...

Cool, and thanks for the tips and review. Also, sorry this chapter is so short, the other chapters will be a little longer, but I just feel like ending at ...

God bless you as well. It's really no trouble at all to write reviews for my peers. I love to, and I love to check out others works as well. ...

It's okay, no worries. Everyone needs a little help sometimes! :D Keep writing... Oh wait, that's your line, (hint, hint, your username)...