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  • Other » Romantic, Narrative
    Re: ah

    Greetings! I really really love what you have written here. You got one paragraph describing how the girl feels and then another about the boy. I really enjoyed that. The ...

    Dec 7, 2015

  • Article / Essay » General, General
    Re: Something about the rain..

    Thank you for the review! I don't mind changing the "have" to "has" but H2O is written because I'm a scienctific person. So I don't know if I want to ...

    Feb 18, 2015

  • Poetry » Narrative, Realistic
    Re: The things I'll never be able to tell you

    Thank you for the review! I'm glad you interpreted the right things about this poem. The sarcasm was completely intentional, I was kind of worried that people wouldn't be able ...

    Jan 2, 2015

  • Poetry » Narrative, Realistic
    Re: The things I'll never be able to tell you

    Thank you for reviewing this. It means a lot to me. It's a little personal and a little fiction but the story is that the guy found another girl, not ...

    Dec 29, 2014

  • Article / Essay » General, General
    Re: Being A Bookworm

    You're welcome! :)

    Dec 7, 2014

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: Prisoner to the stagger

    I just edited some part of the poem. Added some words, removed some. I didnt feel like removing or adding too much since I like that this poem just happened ...

    Nov 30, 2014

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: Prisoner to the stagger

    Thanks, I almost made another one that night but I wanted to go back to sleep! and OH! Well at first I didn't really plan five lines, it just happened ...

    Nov 29, 2014

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: Prisoner to the stagger

    wasn't*

    Nov 29, 2014

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: Prisoner to the stagger

    This poem just flowed out of me. to be honest with you, i didnt even think about these words coming out. Some of them i did but most of them ...

    Nov 29, 2014

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: Prisoner to the stagger

    Thank you, Jack! Why was it sad? aww it was supposed to make you cry!

    Nov 29, 2014

  • Script » Realistic, Culture
    Re: Personality rant

    I've posted the poem! Hours ago but you should still check it out and tell me what your thoughts are on it!

    Nov 29, 2014

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: Prisoner to the stagger

    Well thanks for the review! This was really just a random poem I wrote at 5am and mind was trying create another part to it but I kept denying it ...

    Nov 28, 2014

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Mellowing a Mare

    hello! I like this poem! The title really got me interested in reading it so I did and It's really well written so good job! Keep up the good work! ...

    Nov 28, 2014

  • Poetry » Lyrical, Health
    Re: Frozen in Time

    this is a nice little poem! I like it! I especially like the last two lines. It's so true and complete. I like the alliteration with "every" keep on writing! ...

    Nov 28, 2014

  • Poetry » Lyrical, Health
    Re: Frozen in Time

    this is a nice little poem! I like it! I especially like the last two lines. It's so true and complete. I like the alliteration with "every" keep on writing! ...

    Nov 28, 2014


In a hole in the ground there lived a hobbit. Not a nasty, dirty, wet hole, filled with the ends of worms and an oozy smell, nor yet a dry, bare, sandy hole with nothing in it to sit down on or to eat: it was a hobbit-hole, and that means comfort.
— JRR Tolkien