An environment or place in which a person feels content in is a place he/she would never get tired of, where he/she can formulate clear ideas, has no stress of the world and simply be who he/she wants to be. My content filled environment consists of a rainy background, a silent room and myself; where nothing but the rain's noise and my thoughts are heard. There is no sophistry in my haven and no distractions. I do not feel stressed or worried in here. Most would say it is a predicament but it is not to me, I value the rarity or consistency of rain as a plant would. They need it to live, I need it to be myself. The rain brings out a calmer side to my personality. Within this environment I call my own, solitude is best, company is not minded but they must be warned that I might be laconic because I am only trying to take in the environment and take a break from the world.
Many may question why I feel so peaceful, intelligent and confident while it is only raining, the pitter-patter that occurs once and a while or one day after another, but I see it that it only makes sense. I would smile and answer the question politely and try to explain. I would conclude that the percussion of the rain speaks to me, it has a calming effect on me and that I understand the rain. To expand on that answer, I would say that the rain is a life experience; it may ruin plans or trap some inside their homes but we should appreciate the excuse to cancel plans or stay in sometimes. It may not be ideal for some but it is definitely something to enjoy. It may not be everyone's opinion that rain is peaceful but what would the world be without rain? The world would not be naturally enriched by the most important liquid on the planet. I would not have a content environment, my mind would never slow down and I would never be at rest.
Rain does not happen everyday where I live but I do not need much, an hour or so of rain is enough to calm my mind for a month at times but nothing can replicate or replace the experience. I try computer programs that have background sound of rain but instead of feeling relaxed, I feel stressed and wrecked. This proves that the natural experience itself is inspiring to me, it is the sound and atmosphere created that matters to me. When it rains and I have time to myself in my room, I sit by my window and stare at the beautiful rain. I listen carefully to the sound and familiarize myself to its irregular beat. I reminisce, distant myself from others and focus on myself. The beneficial part about this environment are the feelings to it that make it adjustable, I can adapt to any place while it is formed; feel at ease because of it. All I need is a window to see the rain and a room quiet enough to hear the rain but even hearing the rhythm, smelling it; which is a fresh scent of H2O at its best, and feeling the raindrops on my skin for awhile is enough to calm me for the rest of the day.
This environment is serene as can be and nothing else is required, it can happen anywhere. The results are phenomenal, a therapist could not do better. There is no cost and no talk, just the rain and the quietness. I can write fiction, make small talk or simply lay in bed. The situation is flexible. One of the things I have learned is that rain is a part of life. Life experiences can be upbeat and noisy, peaceful and gentle but it is just a phase in life and that is needed in life.
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Heyo, Flite here for a review. Being a fellow lover of rain myself, I can totally relate to this piece. And all in all, it is quite well-written and conveys your message across. Because it's in essay, I'm not sure if the general conventions of fiction applies to such a piece. So whatever I say below, is just my take on this and how you can improve it.
My first little nit-pick is that, don't write he/she in an essay. If you're going to say it, only use it when you absolutely need that. It makes the essay look unprofessional, and worst, disrupts the flow of reading.
My mind kept reading it like this he slash she, if you don't want to pin a specific gender. Just use the pronoun 'they', works well.
Let's look at the beginning of this essay, I don't particularly like it too much. I feel that the entire first paragraph is too dry for an essay of this nature, it's a self-narrated version of what rain means to you. And goes back to the case of telling, the tone in there is pretty flat due to the lack of description and emotion in there. The sentences are also quite long-winded, so I'd chop them into smaller sections. You also tend to repeat yourself with what you're writing.
You've repeated the first line before the first comma already. The rest of the sentence is basically reiterating that first sentence. And there is a very mechanical tone to this. Even in essays, remember to have a good balance of show and tell.
So, show us and describe the rain and give us insight, intimate emotions into how you feel. Another main point I want to point out is that the language here is very stiff at times, because of how formal it is. Unless this is a formal essay, there is no harm in loosening that a bit. And also, I'd actually spend more time on making that extended metaphor of rain equalling to life. Because that's the best part of this essay.
That's all for now, hope I've helped, if you've got any questions, feel free to PM me.
-Flite
Hey!... here for a review.
I really liked all that you have written, and I can actually relate. (How awesome is THAT? xD )
The title was nice. It basically defined what your article was about.
I didn't really find any spelling errors but there's just one grammatical error that I'd like to point out-
"An environment or place in which a person feels content in is a place he/she would never get tired of, where he/she can formulate clear ideas, have no stress of the world and simply be who he/she wants to be."
^^ In the above lines, I think that it should be "has no stress of the world" because here, you are talking about one person( he/she). You haven't used "they" , otherwise it would have been correct.
No other errors. xD
They way you described everything might have been monotonous, but it wasn't. It was soothing. It had this calming effect even when I was reading it.
Just one thing that I feel could have been written differently was the use of "H2O". I don't know why, but it sort of ruined the fun I was having while reading your article. The word "water" is a better substitute.
Otherwise, great job with the whole thing.
Even your ending was perfect.
You nailed it. xD
Keep writing, stay amazing!! xD
Thank you for the review! I don't mind changing the "have" to "has" but H2O is written because I'm a scienctific person. So I don't know if I want to change that because this essay was meant to talk about ourselves. But I'm glad you enjoyed most of the essay! It delights me that someone besides myself can relate!