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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Clouds of Chalk

    Honestly, at first I thought it was a sad poem, until the very end. Maybe you want to keep the happy ending, but it would have been much more touching ...

    Dec 23, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: That is the way

    This poem made me want to cry...its emotion is overwhelming. You didn't show me his cuts on your back, But I saw them when I made love to you. You ...

    Dec 23, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Nathaniel Stone, Anarchist

    I honestly have no idea where you're going with this teenage rebel (I honestly don't like him), but I want to help, so here I am. :D Comments/suggestions/corrections are in ...

    Dec 22, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: The Girl With Green Eyes - Chapter 1

    All right. I liked your story "much much much" but then the whole rape thing...kind of ruined it for me. I hope the rest of your novel isn't full of ...

    Dec 21, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: -Age of Mentality- (Literary Journal Entry)

    Hey First of all, this poem is...well, emotionally wrenching. I just hope that my relationship with my mom never changes... Here are some corrections/comments/suggestions I am now free Now yours ...

    Dec 21, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Mary Christmas

    Hi! Honestly, when I first clicked on this, I thought I would see some poem expounding on how awesome Christmas is, lalala (no offense taken, I hope). I was pleasantly ...

    Dec 21, 2010
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: Just Another Day

    Hi! This was a really good short story, and I really liked reading it (a cool and spooy interpretation of what WW3 might look like...). The other reviewers already found ...

    Dec 21, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Unfortunate Event of a Disillusioned Knight

    This is really funny, and my guess is you're trying to make fun of the Middle Ages (duh...) :D Here are all the corrections and comments (in red text) I ...

    Dec 21, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Crickets

    Oh my...this is really beautiful. I don't know what else to say. The imagery is nice, and it gives the whole poem a feeling of mystery and love. My favorite ...

    Dec 20, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: You're Perfect

    Hi! I really like the poem...I saw the same things that the previous reviewer mentioned, so you should correct those. I also really like that the poem kind of has ...

    Dec 20, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Through These Eyes

    Hey! No spelling mistakes found, so good job on that score! As for the actual poem... I'm sorry, maybe I'm wrong, but I don't really think you're right there. The ...

    Dec 20, 2010
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: 5 Reasons Transvestites Are Better Than Everyone

    Oh I loved this! Like the above reviewer said, it's sort of serious and funny at the same time. It's a little one-sided though, and if you want this to ...

    Dec 20, 2010


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