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That is god dam good Hunter i like how it start fast not like some story there no problem i can think of but carry i must know more

Cool but put the rest in more more must have more

I like it as well make more chapters plz carry on never stop writing if ur good at it

That is so lovely almost enough make u cry with joy it truely is a great paragraph =D>

I almost stopped reading the history of the place was too long but good story but explain more it was too confusing

What I see here is a big story in a far-too-small package. You've got the language of a folktale down, and it sounds good, but the story here seems to ...