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Normally I'm not a fan of cliches. They detract from peice but to get over idea it's rather ingenius. You use every cliche you can think of, but the end ...

Tis intresting, I don't understand, but tis is intresting. I can't really say more, the shortness works, the word choice works. It's exellently written. Still, I don't understand it.. :s. ...

Sadly I agree with Jared emotion is nothing if reader not intrested. This is boring, it doesn't even let people be intrested :/. Sorry also don't critique the critique.

About the misspelling of Incandescence, it's how you spell it in Britain. Thanks for through review. I really do wanna publish this and all reviews are much appreicated. :D

To be honest with ya Ayra I see this more as a poem. I recommend you actually make it into a poem. You ever tried poetry if not, you should ...

I meant no offence, just at fourteen I couldn't write worth squat lmao. :P God I've changed so much. Still pick them up nowagain :).

Tsk... tsk... Grammar! I feel tempted to fix it! LMAO. Now no more bringing it up!

*Wrote* LMAO, see I've become grammar nut sort of. Now lets close curtain on this sad chapter of my days in YWS. :P.

Because I was fifteen when I typed this or fourteen. Point is I typed like so horribly. It's painful to look at now O_O.

Dang... I hoped some of my old posts never come back up... *blushes* Way I typed was criminal I should be flogged for it.

Monster by Christopher Pike, also the bloodiest book I've read. It's so damn creepy. Whole idea. I felt like being sick as it described how she wanted to eat the ...

We've no life, but if ya wish we can continue this in pm's. As reviewers seeing convo going on in thread annoys them. :) Keep it up! VSN.

You just edit post on here. Unless you've changed it lots. See like I posted Revised version of my chapter 1. Just edit it yeh. It's only if it's like ...

Well I've got all of them except the newest one which I wished would of carried on from Free Gladers. I prefer hearing about that. I was shocked that both ...

*Phew* I was afraid I would get slapped for liking books with illustrations. But they are highly original. Unlike these. There are characters we've never seen, wonderful species, floating rocks, ...