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What I see here, is a series of ideas, never expanded upon, so look only like single sentences. The idea has some originality, just work on keeping us interested. This ...

I may be bias since I love all stuff medieval. But this is brilliant. And it''s not a serious poem, but you're characterization is hilarious. It would work better as ...

... Poetry like this is best avoided as it cliche and just plain angst. You also navelgaze. First rule of poetry, tell us a story, tell us about yourself but ...

Oh god, not 'poor me' and 'angst' poetry. It's cliche and gives us no emotion. You drag on contrived idea, with great lack of originality. Then go on and ramble. ...

Not much to nit pick Yoha, my main problem is you lose the flow with such a word like 'condencending' rethink that line. Other that that. I get the poem, ...

Lets begin, now this poem, I felt nothing. It's all good and well to have wonderful imagery but I never felt anything from it. You tell us instead of showing. ...

Hmm, this is very cliche, with the whole dove thing and piercing arrows. Which greatly weakens this peice as an idea that had some potential into a mess of cliches. ...

Ha. Beat me too this one. No fair. IT'S ON! Jk. What can I say? Fantastic. Uh what? Anyway, this was interesting and you start off quite well but then ...

*Backs away* Yeh wow, that's mad, I didn't fully get, but wow. It was like a black comedy since it some grusome death in it. and it's very odd. But ...

Hmm, it's not amazing, but for a poem written as nusery rhyme tis is interesting. My main nitpick is you could make it more mysterious by invoking some imagery while ...

This is quite weak with the forced rhyming and not really giving us insight into the people. Sure they're fighting but I didn't feel anything it was all just words, ...

Ami caught mostly everything but to reiterate. This poem isn't one that suits not having puntuaction not only does it look tidier having it in, it also makes it easier ...

No offence meant, but this bored me, the end was so anti-climatic and idea isn't even that original. Nothing wrong with using something unoriginal, but tell it in an original ...

If this is satire it's not really good. Not even that effective, the imagery is crude and barely fits the whole idea. The whole idea is unrelatable you give us ...

Look at this! Click here! It's another 'spoiler'. I mean, just look at him! Scroll down to the video, and watch it. It is so cheap, he really thinks he ...