davidechoe13

Really good i would like to read some more of it. i saw now bad problems atter of fact i didn't really see any that stood out to me. good ...

Bravo, Bravo! Very good actually i didn't see any really bad errors in their there was one place right below here... "Why.Doesn't. She Know?" The periods there could be turned ...

There is a reason why there are so many reviews on this story. It's good, very good. I like the way you wrote in first person easy to follow up ...

Uuum, i must say in honesty that was weird and really weird. Personally the panther WAS the best part, till he turned out to be "God". the story actually kept ...

I absolutely love the way you melted the letters into such a graceful, Word. I am truly stunned as to your capability in writing, with such a passion and such ...

You are getting better every chapter, i like the length of it i encourage that (quite a teensy bit) anyway really (and i find this hard for myself sometimes) but, ...

You're doing really good, im actually a little confused, maybe a little more history as to why this guy is bad news or whatever you did, in my opinion better ...

Hi just a quick little comment before i review um i think Flyingchaos plus your picture is really funny :) okay but that's besides the point. I found very little ...

Okay, good news; sounds interesting,not too long not too short. bad-ish news: some grammar stuff in their and i really ad no idea who was the main character up until ...

okay,good news first. I thought this was very interesting the idea and everything is good, i dont know what your plans for this are or anything but i think it ...

i don't know if you have another meaning for this but i think it is MUTINY if that's what you mean i could be wrong but you know. I thought ...

well hi again i can't find anything to review because it's hard to find good writing online so another good chapter!!! I liked it a lot. the length of the ...

Okay im just gonna say i need a few points i hope you don't mind if i just drag things out a bit, i personally find almost absolutely nothing wrong ...

One of the few things I've been able to read on this site I thought it was very interesting, i like the way that the chapter is not too long ...

Okay i just need a few points so if you don't mind i really only have a few things to say but im gonna drag it out just a bit. ...