darko.demark666

Yeah, metal rules...

I just said what I think. If you don't like it, ask someone else for opinion. Critiques are supposed to be rude sometimes...but not the writer.

Hi!....welcome to YWS...I think you wont get critique under this section...try in fiction or something like that...;)

Rothwise, are you angry at me or what.???.. Please don't review my works anymore... Explosive pen..thank you...I'll correct it as soon as I can.

basically, this cant even be called poetry. Wow, since when are you became E.A. Poe... You can say that, I would rather for you to kick my ass than say ...

Thank you all. I really have problems with those minor mistakes in every my poem....

Okay, first, I'm a she. :lol: Whoops..sorry...

For all those that are in a superior group of people who desn't understand my poems: It's about fear,life,love,sorrow or something like that and usually I am the subject. In ...

Poems don't have to rhyme. Sometimes when you rhyme too much the poem goes bad. I agree with you, but that was something between rhyme and nothing. He can make ...

I just got to say: free verse-definitely. Why do you need last verses of each stanzas in one(or two-that makes the whole thing more confusing) words?

Overall, it was a bit confusing. I believe it's about someone who loses the right way and seeks to find it, but can't? It's about me...that was logic, isn't it? ...

[quote="Nate"] The fourth line of the fourth stanza was also odd, and it feels like it was added in just to make that stanza four lines long. I'd just get ...

Accidentally.. I was trying to edit it so i quote it... lol :)

Dialogue -life is pain, pain is life. -but it can be better. -still with 2 edges knife. -write him a peaceful letter -life is weak, weak is life. -you are ...

What second draft???