danielle17

I liked this because I could really relate to it. Infact, it was scary how much I could relate to it. I love poems with emotion and this poem has ...

Good topic choice. Everyone has been through heartache at some point and the best thing about this is that its easy to relate to. You could have used better grammer ...

I assume this poem is about school? If i'm right I didn't quite understand this part; Never can I leaveto see Mother's sweet face. It confused me a little and ...

I liked it but it was rather confusing, you over detailed some of your points and didn't detail or explain others enough for example; [quoteFinally, I realise it. Finally, I ...

[quote][Rain. Drenched clothing hung to him, and his tears mixed with the water streaming down his face, dripping from his hair. He walked forward, up the slope./quote] you really feel ...

mmmh...the story rambles on about nothing in particular and if you improved on you sentence structure and your spelling and punctuation your story would improve greatly. I'm struggling to understand ...

It like this :D it was a little rushed though and parts of it were difficult to 'get'. I think you should have detailed it alot more to improve it ...

wow...what a hard hitting topic to write about. I really liked that you were brave enough to choose this topic. I would have been good if the poem was longer ...