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Maybe I'm demented or abnormal, but I found your cliche love story hilarious. I can see what you mean by this story being cliche. Girl is madly in love with ...

His stare broke within seconds, but I couldn’t take my sight off of him. *eyes-sight doesn't make much sense here. This is an interesting idea. I love the whole pill=vivid ...

"A little bludlust are you, Miss?" Nigel laughed as I dragged Romeo into the carriage. * blood-lust I have not killed a human, but if you would like to meet ...

Wow, this is an intense novel. I really enjoyed reading this chapter. I haven't read the previous ones, but your writing is really captivating. The characters are very well characterized ...

Okay, so let me get this straight. The girl's name is Fiel and she couldn't see at the beginning of the chapter because of all the fog and couldn't move ...

We walked down the trail that we walked everyday together. I smiled as you held my hand and started messing with your hair as you always did when you get ...

Every time I try to escape I am pulled back down further, like an invisible force grabbing at my ankles , tugging me further and further, driving me to madness ...

Okay. So this is for school, correct? I suggest you post the prompt here too, so people can see if you're addressing the issues you're supposed to. I like your ...

"What did you do Matt ," she squealed. Comma before Matt. Matthew looked at her, mirroring her look of horror. You already said look. "Tell here !" Lacy hissed. *her ...

The teacher said the list of names outloud, but mine was never mention twice. *mentioned "Said" is in past tense so "mention" should be too. I got home frowning and ...

Hello. This is an interesting piece you have here. I haven't seen many works about dwarves, so congrats on that. Overall, the grammar and writing was decent, but there were ...

Nothings worth the end. *Nothing's Nothing is Cause when you have a problem * 'Cause Cause means like I'm doing this for a good cause. The way you're using "cause" ...

I like the concept of your poem novel, but like mentioned previously, there are grammatical errors that need to be corrected. You can definitely write, but you may want to ...

Very heartfelt and well-spoken. I'm sure your friend will love this poem! It is so true that words are just too limited to describe all of our complex feelings and ...

:P Now that I've actually comprehended what the story means, I shall give you a review. I like how this is very thought provoking, like a riddle. The colors and ...