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I think this poem is great! Love it!

Anyway, I think you're awesome and you should keep writing

And the poem's really powerful ^^

It made me cry and by the way, I love you too xD
Hehe =D

What I feel about you:

*You have a strong potential
*You're going to be an awesome writer
* You can write really strong poems which makes people's heart melt :') Like mine just did!
*You're poems are worth a read.
* Keep writing and wall post me when you have new poems ^^

Love it! I think the corrections are all made. So, anyway, Good luck! xD

Love,
Cookie or LM!

Hello.

I think it's a good effort to write something positive for a change. I've noticed that a lot of poems in the site have been taking a darker turn.

Now though I do like the message you are trying to convey, I think you could have done it better.

First, I commend you once again for rhyming but it doesn't always work to the benefit of the poem. I think that some rhymes in this poem sound a bit forced. Particularly the first stanza with "you make me hurl". I felt like you chose that line only to make it rhyme a little with myrrh. It was a little out of place. A rhyme scheme can be very constricting but if you are intent on using a rhyme scheme, I suggest that you really try to widen your vocabulary so as to have a broader choice of words. It's unfortunate when a rhyming poem fails just because of an out of place line.

Second, I don't think that capitalizing a bunch of words from time to time help your case at all. It comes off as too dramatic. It makes the supposedly motivational feel of this poem a little laughable. Perhaps you can italicize instead of capitalizing?

I do like your message, but it's cliche. There's a lot of motivational stuff out there that have this exact same message and because the message of the poem is cliche, the only way to present this was in a new and original way. However, I find that many of the lines you used in this poem are very old-hat as well. Use more vivid and original imagery. Present this in a new way to the reader.

Nixie

This is a very encourraging poem and you manage to deliver the message real good both with good imagery, reflections and powerful lines!

"You have the full potiental
To be anything you desire
So don’t go by the world’s standards
Set yourself much higher." - This stanza here is incredibly good, it could be a powerful poem just by itself, it's that good!

* This piece has got emotion
* The flow is good
* You've used punctuation, big plus for that
* The structure of the piece, with regular stanzas and all - Perfect
* No grammatic errors as far as I can see
* This poem has got a message, a good one!

So... as you see, there's nothing much to complain about! 5/5 icky sticky spiders to you!

Good Luck & Keep Writing

// Demoness

aww what an amazing strong and beautiful poem! you had my attention since the beginning and i loved every word line after line, stanza after stanza.your poem speaks the truth and says it all.it made me feel something warm afterwards and i know this poem could help someone whom is having a hard time.great work!

Great Great Great Great Great! It is nice to have an encouraging poem, there are not many! You had amazing flow and emotion! The stanza structure is grand! My favourite line is ;

You have the full potiental
To be anything you desire
So don’t go by the world’s standards
Set yourself much higher.

I applaud your great efforts to use your writing to help others!

Nothings worth the end.

Cause when you have a problem

Aw, I really like this poem, I really do. I couldn't find any errors or anything in it so it's very well done. Your title caught my eye so I decided to read it. This poem, unlike many poems, was very moving, I'm not sure if you were speaking to the people on this website but if you were, thank you. Lol. Um, if you weren't speaking to the people on this website(even if you were or weren't) it was worth reading.

~Faith(: