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I like how this story was written with some final thoughts from the MC in the beginning and the short but impacting plot-line. However there were two things that confused ...

Hi, Ancient. Review as requested. I had to read this a couple of times to devise an interpretation as to what your prose meant, and here’s what I came up ...

I really don't like how the second stanza is formatted either, but I like most of the poem. We sit on the porch, Sipping the thick, Steaming cocoa, Laughter filling ...

I remember reading this awhile ago, and you've definitely added some new content. I still don't really understand why they're so freaked out by the concept of public school though. ...

What I really like about this poem is the contrasting points of view. It makes me think of all the lies we tell people and how greatly our ideas differ ...

I had gotten one of the remote control flying helicopters for Christmas that year, and was intent on trying it out. There shouldn't be a comma here. "What have we ...

Like stargazer, I'm not a poetry expert. I think it's okay to spell things out for the reader though, but you have cliche wording. Like they used to Like I ...

Hi. First off, I'd suggest you consider your audience. Are you writing for adults or teens/young adults? This will shape the way you write things. If you're targeting young adults, ...

Hi Kaitemay. I don't understand what you are trying to say. You may want to consider working on your grammar and spelling. On YWS, we use proper grammar, spelling and ...

But just because failure teaches you things, it doesn’t mean you should try to fail. It means that if you do fail, it’s okay, because you learned something, and it ...

Hello. The rhyme scheme seemed a bit forced at times. The way it was structured wasn't very symmetrical. Sometimes you had the abab, aaaa, abbb, etc. You write well with ...

I can see, like you said, your problem with tenses. You have to decide if you want to write it in past or present tense, because I don't know which ...

Since her death, the start of every Spring broke my heart. Shouldn't be capitalized. He and I were separated by some imagined wall from since I could walk or talk. ...

I would force myself up, in search of the bathroom, where extra- stregth Tylenol would be hiding in medicine cabinets, pop three pills in my mouth without water and go ...

I'm going to give you the benefit of the doubt. Perhaps these were all typos and you didn't have enough time to revise? As for the story itself, there isn't ...