crescent

Hello, Nike! Crescent, here to review today. First off, I'd like to say you capture the drunken state quite well with your words: the too loud talking, the blurred vision, ...

"She wore loose fitting black shirt with a silver snowflake sewn expertly in the center, symbolizing her rank amongst the city as one of their rulers." =>Your tense changes to ...

This sounds like what a modern day Annie cheerleader would chant. You know, "keep your chin up, for tomorrow...etc.". I liked how optimistic this poem was and the meaning behind ...

I like the way you structured your poem; it's very interesting. I once tried to do something like this, but it didn't work well for me. The rhyme scheme for ...

I like the bit of foreshadowing you used at the beginning of this prose. At my second glance, it provides deeper meaning, and I understand why Charity is so cautious ...

My Sweet ________, Fine. I’m done fighting it. I can’t just shove it back and wait for something to happen. I’m done pretending that you’re just my best friend. Because ...

Before I finish , I strictly told Marcus Wilson to stop singing anymore because he had a dreadful voice and I totally hated it. *finished-you have been writing this whole ...

Hello. The other YWSers have provided you with very insightful advice. I agree with Rachel about clarity. Some of your sentences are confusing, and I think it's fair to say ...

"I don't remember hiring a--- oh wait, one of our cameras is on the fritz, what should we do?" This line seems a bit out of place. The security guard ...

Desperately I struggle to shake myself from this trance that has consumed me, but its shackles are tight and I can no longer break free. Comma after "Desperately". You need ...

He's talking to you, to all of you on the 7 Train to Times Square at 6:37pm when the sky is a painting, maybe a Renoir impressionism one, with strokes ...

Hello. Because most of the reviews on here are grammar related, I'm going to primarily focus on content. The interrogator threw the papers down on the table. I looked down ...

I've struggled with the same issue writing, as I too, have not been in a relationship before. But, like peanutgallery says, you gain experience by experiencing. If you like this ...

What you've done with this is really cute. This is an adorable short story. I like how you personalized the story, how you added the small details like the paint ...

Sometimes my mind doesn't comprehend what your sayin' when the day ends And I just wanna go to sleep This seems to be a common error these days... "Your" and ...