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  • Poetry » Dramatic, Lyrical Re: Gymnopedie #3

    The turmoiling and bothersome thoughts can feel like a crescendo of high and low notes, changing in intensity, but never changing in effect. It can be hectic, but controlled to ...

    Jul 20, 2023
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: She was the Sun, He was the Moon

    This reminds me of “The sun proposed to the moon” trend on YouTube. I like it! Most people use the sun as a symbol of joy, but it’s the very ...

    Jul 19, 2023
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Narrative Re: lost song.

    Before I heard of lost media, I never thought that it was possible for a creative work to be lost to time. It makes me a little sad to think ...

    Jul 18, 2023
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: The Accidental Magic 2 the 2nd to last unicorn.....chapter 7

    Does Ellie’s spell that she did with Baddie have to do with Charlotte losing her memory, or is that completely separate? This is the end of part two? Oh boy…I ...

    Jul 17, 2023
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: Of Fake and Real Time Travellers

    I like how you talked about humans reacting to unfamiliar things. It’s so true! Either they’re fascinated, freaked out, or both. I think that Simon was lonely and just having ...

    Jul 16, 2023
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Cruxless. Chapter's 1-4 of the rewrite, uh... It's still mid guy's don't worry. Not much has changed.

    It seems like from this rewrite, Cooper is more unsure about his fate. I like that! It’s interesting. Hinsa gives me Harley Quinn vibes. (Before she broke up with The ...

    Jul 15, 2023
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Humor Re: A Letter to Satan

    A kid writing a letter to Satan instead of Santa could be an easily made mistake. At least Satan got Joyce what she truly wanted: A pony. That ending was ...

    Jul 14, 2023
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: (the shadow crown book draft) chapter 3

    Deianara wants to help them? That was unexpected, but…pleasantly unexpected. It’s great to have an ally like her around. More dangers might arise because of this, but even then, it’s ...

    Jul 13, 2023
  • Short Story » Supernatural, Dramatic Re: Re: Eloise Meets Alastair

    I decided to check this out since I like vampires…and I’m intrigued. Eloise’s life is never going to be the same again, especially with the moments of time slipping in ...

    Jul 12, 2023
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: (the shadow crown book draft) chapter 1;2

    I’d like to see a continuation of this story. Deianara and Caerwyn definitely have history with each other. Does Reyna not trust the princess enough that she lies about her ...

    Jul 11, 2023
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Chapter 4

    Annabel tasted freedom for just a few minutes, but Elijah had taken her away. :( It seems like she’ll have to wait out on an escape even longer or risk ...

    Jul 10, 2023
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Realistic Re: Archer's Paradox Chapter 5: Misfire

    To answer your questions: Jay’s conclusions are explained well, the city seems very haunting, and the details are enough. Being in the city he was as The Ghost will challenge ...

    Jul 9, 2023
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Chapter 3

    Oh man…things are not looking good. I’m unsure on whether Elijah should be trusted. For her own safety, Annabel should just trust herself. Maybe she could bring someone with her ...

    Jul 8, 2023
  • Novel / Chapter » Supernatural, General Re: The Spooky Squad: Chapter 4

    That ending was epic! My favorite part was when Hannah fought Beau. I also liked that you included the biblically accurate angels, The Thrones. Not too many people describe angels ...

    Jul 7, 2023
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Chapter 2

    Poor Victor…he was so hopeful about escaping. Why did Elijah have terror in his eyes? If he actually feels bad for the children, he’d do something to help them. But ...

    Jul 6, 2023


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