craftywriter

Ok can anybody say SUSPENSE!!!! My thing is, however, that this doesn't make much sense as a proluge. Usually proluges sets up something that will happen later in the story. ...

I am hooked! I think this is very good and possibly addicting. If you think it should be a TV show turn it into a script. ( that was my ...

I think you have a nice start and a good beginnig. My revisions would be these: * Do what skutter11 taught you with grammer. it makes things alot easier to ...

Hey Brookie I love the idea of this story but I got confused by the dialouge. When having a conversation you should go more like this: " I'm sorry Mom", ...

AMAZING!!!! I truly think you did - are doing Pandora great justice. I love charecter rewrites and mythology. If you write more please PM me!!!!!! You do a good job ...

I have a strong dislike for pesssism too!!!. My first poem I posted ( the only thing I have posted!) I got busted for use of juvinille and simple words. ...

YOU HAVE TO WRITE MORE!!!! For most of the story I couldn't even tell it was written by a 14 year-old! That means grammer was great, creativeness was suberb, and ...

Hey AMU this is craftywriter.We chatted together? Anyway, your piece totally captivated me. You seriosly need to write more. It's really clever plot line you just need to expand it ...